The iPhone Duo Doesn't Tempt Me — Here's Why

Red Pen Correction — iPhone Duo Diary

On September 9, Apple released the iPhone Duo in publicto the public¹. Usually I'm curiousabout new releases,² but this time it isn't so attractive to me very strangelystrangely³. The fact causeThe real reason⁴ is that I've already had a⁵ Samsung Galaxy Fold 8 since this⁶ August 10 and I have been trying to gettingto get⁷ used to the device and Android eco-systemecosystem⁸ actively. However, deeply in minddeep down⁹, I realized that I had felt like iOS eco-system wasI no longer feel the iOS ecosystem is¹⁰ not so convenient and comfortable to me anymore¹¹. First of all, appearances of hardware and softwarethe look of the hardware and software¹² is too consistentuniform¹³ and not newoutdated¹⁴. For the last 12 years, I had always been in the've always been surrounded by¹⁵ similarly designed icons and UI/UX, which are so boring. Besides, it doesn't have any workaroundthere's no way¹⁶ to use the¹⁷ camera without a shutter sound andor¹⁸ to record content of phone conversationa phone conversation¹⁹ without notification to an opponentnotifying the other party²⁰. Above all, there is little room for customizing the built-in UI/UX in iOS whilewhereas²¹ Galaxy phones have such a huge room for tailoring the device by using so-called, Good Lock applicationusing the so-called Good Lock app²². Of course there are consthere are drawbacks, too²³. Still I prefer to usingprefer using²⁴ Macbook and so I had to give up some hands offhands-off²⁵ features and iCloud sync. for photosiCloud photo sync²⁶, but there have already been various alternatives not even covering 100%though there are already various alternatives, even if none of them cover it 100%²⁷. The other critical weakness of the newly released Apple device areis²⁸ its price and weight. I would have to pay at least KRW 1M more to buy it, expecting more repair fee secondarilyand I'd expect higher repair costs on top of that²⁹. Moreover I would have to carry it with feeling heavier by around 50gcarry a phone that's about 50g heavier³⁰. Both are so critical particularlyespecially critical³¹ for me. I don't have any willingnessdesire³² to take the plunge of purchasing over KRW 3M of smartphonebuying a smartphone priced over KRW 3 million³³ in my current situation and I'm the one who don'tsomeone who doesn't³⁴ want to use a protective case to carry a phone, feeling any inconvenience out of heavy weightsince I dislike the inconvenience of the extra weight³⁵.

Anyway, for the time being, I will keep using my new Fold 8, enjoying the wider screen for better visibility and the light-weight body for my long termlong-term³⁶ wrist health.

선생님 총평 📝

1"in public"보다 "to the public"이 자연스러운 표현.
2~3curious 뒤에 무엇에 대한 호기심인지 붙여주고, "very strangely" 어순이 어색해 "strangely"로 정리.
4~8"The fact cause"는 없는 표현이라 "The real reason"으로, Fold 8 앞 관사 a 추가, "this August 10"의 this는 불필요, "trying to getting"은 "to get"으로, eco-system은 보통 한 단어 ecosystem.
9~11"deeply in mind"는 원어민 표현이 아니라 "deep down"으로, 과거완료 "I had felt"는 지금도 유효한 감정이라 현재시제로, "no longer"와 뜻이 겹치는 anymore는 삭제.
12~14"appearances...is" 수일치 오류라 단수 주어 "the look...is"로, consistent/not new는 더 정확한 uniform/outdated로.
15"had always been in the"는 전치사구가 어색해 "'ve always been surrounded by"로.
16~20"it doesn't have any workaround"은 번역투라 "there's no way"로, camera 앞 관사 the 추가, 부정문엔 and보다 or, "content of phone conversation"은 "a phone conversation"으로, "notification to an opponent"는 "notifying the other party"로.
21~22대조엔 while보다 whereas가 자연스럽고, "so-called, Good Lock application"의 콤마 오류를 "the so-called Good Lock app"으로 정리.
23"there are cons"는 informal해서 "there are drawbacks, too"로.
24~27"prefer to using"은 to가 불필요해 "prefer using"으로, hands off는 하이픈 필요, "iCloud sync. for photos"는 마침표 오타라 "iCloud photo sync"로, 뒤 절 논리 연결도 자연스럽게 재구성.
28"weakness...are"는 수일치 오류라 "weakness...is"로.
29"expecting more repair fee secondarily"는 어색해 "and I'd expect higher repair costs on top of that"로 재구성.
30"carry it with feeling heavier"는 어색한 표현이라 "carry a phone that's about 50g heavier"로.
31"so critical particularly"는 어순이 어색해 "especially critical"로.
32~35willingness보다 desire가 자연스럽고, "purchasing over KRW 3M of smartphone"은 어순 오류라 "buying a smartphone priced over KRW 3 million"으로, "the one who don't"는 수일치 오류라 "someone who doesn't"로, "feeling any inconvenience out of heavy weight"는 "since I dislike the inconvenience of the extra weight"로.
36"long term"은 명사를 꾸밀 땐 하이픈이 필요해 "long-term"으로.

수정 완본 (낭독용)

On September 9, Apple released the iPhone Duo to the public. Usually I'm curious about new releases, but this time, strangely, it isn't so attractive to me. The real reason is that I've already had a Samsung Galaxy Fold 8 since August 10, and I've been actively trying to get used to the device and the Android ecosystem. However, deep down, I realized that I no longer feel the iOS ecosystem is as convenient and comfortable to me as it used to be. First of all, the look of the hardware and software is too uniform and outdated. For the last 12 years, I've always been surrounded by similarly designed icons and UI/UX, which are so boring. Besides, there's no way to use the camera without a shutter sound or to record a phone conversation without notifying the other party. Above all, there's little room to customize the built-in UI/UX in iOS, whereas Galaxy phones offer huge room for tailoring the device using the so-called Good Lock app. Of course, there are drawbacks, too. Still, I prefer using a MacBook, so I've had to give up some hands-off features like iCloud photo sync — though there are already various alternatives, even if none of them cover it 100%. The other critical weakness of the newly released Apple device is its price and weight. I'd have to pay at least KRW 1 million more to buy it, and I'd expect higher repair costs on top of that. Moreover, I'd have to carry a phone that's about 50g heavier. Both are especially critical for me. I have no desire to take the plunge and buy a smartphone priced over KRW 3 million in my current situation, and I'm someone who doesn't want to use a protective case, since I dislike the inconvenience of the extra weight.

Anyway, for the time being, I'll keep using my new Fold 8, enjoying the wider screen for better visibility and the light-weight body for my long-term wrist health.